Charlotte

Just in case anybody thinks the last post was cheating, I’ve written out one conversation in full 🙂

Mrs Andrews watched Charlotte mixing the paint. She daintily swirled her brush first in one colour, then in another until, happy with the shade she had created, she started dabbing it on the paper.
“Charlotte, are you sure it should be that colour?”
“Yes, Mrs Andrews, You showed us last week how to mix colours.”
“I know, but I think you might have made a bit of a mistake.”
“No Mrs Andrews. I’ve been practising at home with my felt-tip pens. I’m dead good at mixing now.”
“I’m sure you are. It’s just that…pink would be more normal.”
Charlotte shrugged and continued blobbing paint onto her picture, until the forehead, nose and cheeks were all a dazzling emerald colour. “I heard mommy say this morning that daddy would be green with envy when he saw our next-door neighbour’s new car.”

This post is part of the 100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups at Julia’s Place.

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13 Responses to Charlotte

  1. joem18b says:

    nice! i’m tickled pink.

  2. says:

    That was fun! And I like the way it flowed to that finish that made me chuckle.

  3. Anna says:

    Goodness, two pieces AND ofsted…clever lady. I loved your ending to this one. Out of the mouths of babes eh?

  4. Bill Dameron says:

    Again, a wonderful take and excellent surprise ending.

  5. Robin Hawke says:

    Enjoyed this as much as the other, Robin

  6. GSussex says:

    Classic! Great twist and link . . .

  7. Alison Green says:

    ‘Green with envy’ – great! We have all had children do unexpected things but then come out with a totally understandable explanation.

  8. HonieBuk says:

    Don’t you just love kids. You had me thinking the pink was a bit too pink – but green ‘with envy’ that’s just fabulous!

    How and when do children cross over into those funny little things we say themselves.

    I’m always using “get of your high horse lady” to my almost teenage Daughter. She thinks I make these things up. OMG am I sounding like my Mother.

  9. Julia says:

    Out of the mouths…! Great observation of the human variety S-J! I love it & didn’t think you’d cheated with the first one. After all the instruction was ALL DIALOGUE!

  10. HAHAHAHA! You caught me by surprise there. But I have to say I liked the one-sided dialogue better because it captures the energy and chaos of any 1st grade classroom. Both are great!

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