Two surprises

She wasn’t sure at first. Could it really be? Days later she knew – the thin blue line in the window confirmed that their dreams of the last few years had come true. She told him, and they held each other, weeping for joy.

Another surprise…two heartbeats filled her ears. Two bodies, wrapped around each other, filled the screen.

The long weeks stretched out ahead of them, yet passed in the blink of an eye, until, “It’s time,” she said.

Hours later, exhausted but elated, she held them. Piercing yells and contented gurgles came out of the mouths of babes and into the heart of their mother.

This post is part of the 100 Word Challenge for Grown-Ups at Julia’s Place and this week is dedicated to my lovely Twitter friend Harriet.

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23 Responses to Two surprises

  1. Pingback: 100 Word Challenge for Grown Ups – Week#11 | Julia's Place

  2. Julia says:

    Oh what a lovely one and so great to dedicate it to the new mum of twins. You got the whole process in there but with love and emotion. Great writing SJ!

  3. Dughall McCormick says:

    So much in just 100 words! One of the world’s greatest stories told so well!

    I was suffering writer’s block but this has spurred me into action.

  4. Anna Halford says:

    Delightful; really super post. I am so glad I read this :))

    • sjbteaching says:

      Thanks Anna. This is really different to my usual style so I was a bit worried about submitting it. I’m glad you liked it.

      • Anna Halford says:

        The prompts Julia provides are good at forcing a different approach. This was a very well written piece. I’m not sure about mine this week; have another idea and might be naughty and have another attempt later in the week…

        • sjbteaching says:

          It’s not naughty. I’ve done double entries a couple of times now, and so have a few others. I think you’re allowed to share as many as you feel creative enough to write! I really enjoyed reading yours this week – very true to life!

  5. Andy wts says:

    How *sweet*. I must say, I enjoyed this different style. I’m glad you didn’t write a funny one. There’s quite a few of those this week and this is really quite sensitive. And uplifting. About as far as you can get from mine, with a return to darkness … v–v. Well, you need a contrast …

    • sjbteaching says:

      Thanks. Just saw on Facebook that you’ve done a double entry again. Probably won’t have time to read it tonight, but hopefully tomorrow night I’ll catch up on all the new entries.

  6. GSussex says:

    Beautiful! What a tribute . . .

  7. Alison Green says:

    Oh, what a gorgeous tribute to our Harriet and her two brand new girls. This made me a little teary, but then I have a granddaughter due anytime now xx

  8. Robin Hawke says:

    Consider changing the title… It’s so delicious finding out she delivered twins. I felt lucky I skipped it. Robin

  9. Harriet says:

    Thank you thank you thank you. I so appreciate this, it’s really cheered me up today. I’m glad so many other people like it too and that you don’t feel silly for posting it xx

  10. says:

    I liked this straightforward, sweet story. I especially liked the, “… and into the heart of their mother,” part.

    • sjbteaching says:

      Thanks. That was the bit I thought of first – it just sort of followed on (in my head anyway) from the prompt. I seem to make a habit of writing my pieces from the last line backwards.

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